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		<title>Comment on Class for March 11 by Garrett</title>
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		<dc:creator>Garrett</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 12 Mar 2010 05:09:09 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>It is where all the other class documents are - in the 2020 Info section. Hope that helps.</description>
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<p>It is where all the other class documents are &#8211; in the 2020 Info section. Hope that helps.
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		<title>Comment on Class for March 11 by Simpsonj</title>
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		<dc:creator>Simpsonj</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 12 Mar 2010 04:49:18 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>i don&#039;t know if i missing something. But i can&#039;t find the link to get the teacher review sheet. Please help.</description>
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<p>i don&#8217;t know if i missing something. But i can&#8217;t find the link to get the teacher review sheet. Please help.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by austintechhead</title>
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		<dc:creator>austintechhead</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 26 Feb 2010 01:38:43 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>&quot;Would you like fries with that?&quot; Droned the monotonous voice on the loudspeaker/ Jared was about to decline, but his answer was stopped by a big

BOOOM! The world had blown up and Jared was

still quite without his burger and shake. He decided, from under the rubble of the McDonalds ceiling, that fries would not have been a good idea anyway. It was likely that this large Hell Hound spitting in his face would have

taken off his hand. The world not what had blown up, it was the hamburger/ He had finally found the crime lord, who was hiding behind the fries and had planted the bomb in between two patties Jared&#039;s potential meal. Jared reached in the backseat for his bazooka &amp; began rapid firing rockets in a frenzy. When he no longer had rocket left to shoot, he started launching rubble. He continued, unsatisfied until all that was left of the crime lord&#039;s city was ash.</description>
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<p>&#8220;Would you like fries with that?&#8221; Droned the monotonous voice on the loudspeaker/ Jared was about to decline, but his answer was stopped by a big</p>
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<p>BOOOM! The world had blown up and Jared was</p>
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<p>still quite without his burger and shake. He decided, from under the rubble of the McDonalds ceiling, that fries would not have been a good idea anyway. It was likely that this large Hell Hound spitting in his face would have</p>
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<p>taken off his hand. The world not what had blown up, it was the hamburger/ He had finally found the crime lord, who was hiding behind the fries and had planted the bomb in between two patties Jared&#8217;s potential meal. Jared reached in the backseat for his bazooka &amp; began rapid firing rockets in a frenzy. When he no longer had rocket left to shoot, he started launching rubble. He continued, unsatisfied until all that was left of the crime lord&#8217;s city was ash.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by holloway66</title>
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		<dc:creator>holloway66</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 25 Feb 2010 01:22:50 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>1.  The marines breached the door. They had their M16s at the ready. The shot had come from this building.
2. Quick shoot back. We are heavy fire, call in for backup before we get 
3. surrounded. You go that way with alpha team and take the rear of the building. I will take bravo team and storm the front and backup will have to do their job.
4. They moved fast around the side of the building each man covering one another. Just as they approached the back door there was a whizzing that made a puff of cement in front 
5. of them. &quot;no&quot; the sarg screamed &quot;take cover&quot;! Every man dodged for cover.
6. they were in a pickle snipers were set up all around them. There was a whizzing the sarg went down.</description>
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<p>1.  The marines breached the door. They had their M16s at the ready. The shot had come from this building.<br />
2. Quick shoot back. We are heavy fire, call in for backup before we get<br />
3. surrounded. You go that way with alpha team and take the rear of the building. I will take bravo team and storm the front and backup will have to do their job.<br />
4. They moved fast around the side of the building each man covering one another. Just as they approached the back door there was a whizzing that made a puff of cement in front<br />
5. of them. &#8220;no&#8221; the sarg screamed &#8220;take cover&#8221;! Every man dodged for cover.<br />
6. they were in a pickle snipers were set up all around them. There was a whizzing the sarg went down.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by John Lorz</title>
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		<dc:creator>John Lorz</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 24 Feb 2010 06:05:53 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Something wet hit the back of Paul&#039;s head and he moved his hand up to feel what it was. Behind his ear was what was conceivably-- a giant wet spit wad. &quot;Gross, &quot; he thought as he looked behind him. His friends were ducking for cover from-- the principal who had come walking around the corner.
He would get them back but now was not the time; they would pay for playing-- &quot;Screw this. I&#039;m upset. We should go and get some serious fire power and show these knuckleheads what we are all about. No one spits at me! Don&#039;t they know that?&quot;--
So they ran up to the bathroom and collected all the toilet paper they could get and got it all wet and formed the largest spit wad ever! They then went down to the cafeteria.-- In the bucket they carried a mess of water and TP.  Sneaking up they slowly tipped the bucket--

That was the end. I guess we never get to know who they dumped the wad on.</description>
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<p>Something wet hit the back of Paul&#8217;s head and he moved his hand up to feel what it was. Behind his ear was what was conceivably&#8211; a giant wet spit wad. &#8220;Gross, &#8221; he thought as he looked behind him. His friends were ducking for cover from&#8211; the principal who had come walking around the corner.<br />
He would get them back but now was not the time; they would pay for playing&#8211; &#8220;Screw this. I&#8217;m upset. We should go and get some serious fire power and show these knuckleheads what we are all about. No one spits at me! Don&#8217;t they know that?&#8221;&#8211;<br />
So they ran up to the bathroom and collected all the toilet paper they could get and got it all wet and formed the largest spit wad ever! They then went down to the cafeteria.&#8211; In the bucket they carried a mess of water and TP.  Sneaking up they slowly tipped the bucket&#8211;</p>
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<p>That was the end. I guess we never get to know who they dumped the wad on.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by joshdee8</title>
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		<pubDate>Wed, 24 Feb 2010 00:20:15 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>jethro walked down the dirt path, the setting sun lay in his eyes. 
this struggle continued as he attempted to rid his left hand of the bear trap.(change)
&quot;this really hurts.&quot; he bites off his left hand and uses it to lure out some meat that he can kill and eat. he is a surviver of a ship wreck off the coast of hawaii. he has no (change)
idea how long its been since been wandering around. now from loss of blood, he was starting to feel faint. suddenly a figute appeared from the disstant sunset. &quot;martha?&quot; jethro called weakly, &quot;is that you?&quot; the figure(change)
moved in closer and just befor jethero fanted from loss of blood he saw it wasn&#039;t martha, it wasn&#039;t even human as he blacked out.</description>
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<p>jethro walked down the dirt path, the setting sun lay in his eyes.<br />
this struggle continued as he attempted to rid his left hand of the bear trap.(change)<br />
&#8220;this really hurts.&#8221; he bites off his left hand and uses it to lure out some meat that he can kill and eat. he is a surviver of a ship wreck off the coast of hawaii. he has no (change)<br />
idea how long its been since been wandering around. now from loss of blood, he was starting to feel faint. suddenly a figute appeared from the disstant sunset. &#8220;martha?&#8221; jethro called weakly, &#8220;is that you?&#8221; the figure(change)<br />
moved in closer and just befor jethero fanted from loss of blood he saw it wasn&#8217;t martha, it wasn&#8217;t even human as he blacked out.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by jessicawood</title>
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		<dc:creator>jessicawood</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Wed, 24 Feb 2010 00:20:00 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>The car sped down the highway, a blur among the other vehicles. Many passengers in other vehicles wondered what it was that just passed. Trying to get home, not knowing what to expect, James keeps his foot comfortably behind his neck. Nobody ever considered the benefits of being a gymnast driver.
The Olympics were approaching quickly and James had to be in the best shape of his life. Those bars would not be kind to him this year either. He did not qualify four years ago, due to a hand injury in a bear trap. His name was Jethro then... Who cares about Jethro, James, for his Olympic challenge has a numb leg and has no idea what his coach wants him to compete in, whether it be splits between bars that you would normally flip back and forth between, or other amazing feats that made James feel like he was supposed to be in a circus. 
&quot;Oh well,&quot; he sighed, removing his foot from behind his neck. &quot;It might as well been my manager.&quot;</description>
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<p>The car sped down the highway, a blur among the other vehicles. Many passengers in other vehicles wondered what it was that just passed. Trying to get home, not knowing what to expect, James keeps his foot comfortably behind his neck. Nobody ever considered the benefits of being a gymnast driver.<br />
The Olympics were approaching quickly and James had to be in the best shape of his life. Those bars would not be kind to him this year either. He did not qualify four years ago, due to a hand injury in a bear trap. His name was Jethro then&#8230; Who cares about Jethro, James, for his Olympic challenge has a numb leg and has no idea what his coach wants him to compete in, whether it be splits between bars that you would normally flip back and forth between, or other amazing feats that made James feel like he was supposed to be in a circus.<br />
&#8220;Oh well,&#8221; he sighed, removing his foot from behind his neck. &#8220;It might as well been my manager.&#8221;
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by codywg</title>
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		<dc:creator>codywg</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 23 Feb 2010 21:18:13 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Once a long while a go there was a man named harry. harry once this long while ago had done something, something stupid yet heroic. He couldn’t quite remember what is was just off the top of this head and had hired a private investigator to find out, report him to the papers and garner him fame and fortune. But as the private investigator returned he was alarmed at the news that he brought. He was a secret agent who had lost his memory from falling out of a plane. But harry couldn’t believe it he had no secret agent skills. the investigator was offended that harry would doubt his work and in this rage hit him upside the head with his briefcase. suddenly harry found himself over the lifeless body of his dog! ye his dog so after that he decided the heck with this i’m going to be a movie director. So, he did.</description>
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<p>Once a long while a go there was a man named harry. harry once this long while ago had done something, something stupid yet heroic. He couldn’t quite remember what is was just off the top of this head and had hired a private investigator to find out, report him to the papers and garner him fame and fortune. But as the private investigator returned he was alarmed at the news that he brought. He was a secret agent who had lost his memory from falling out of a plane. But harry couldn’t believe it he had no secret agent skills. the investigator was offended that harry would doubt his work and in this rage hit him upside the head with his briefcase. suddenly harry found himself over the lifeless body of his dog! ye his dog so after that he decided the heck with this i’m going to be a movie director. So, he did.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by Kenneth</title>
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		<dc:creator>Kenneth</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 23 Feb 2010 18:06:55 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>(Ken:)It was a lone and dreary day in England where Tom Lived.  He was picking himself up from the heaped dead the Vikings had left.  His armor was badly damaged and he couldn&#039;t find his captain anywhere.  The Sky was a perfect blue, the grass green where there wasn&#039;t blood, (Richard:) it was as if no battle had occurred at all. 

Gim (with a &#039;G&#039;) keep his had under his armor on his shoulder (Hayley:) as he realized the gratefulness he had at that moment for his country. The aliens who had come down to England that day could have indeed destroyed his country. (Camille:) Being a hater of aliens he knew he must seek revenge. He did not work his whole life to watch his country fall apart before his eyes. 

As he sat (Nick:) there for a moment, waiting, hoping, nothing left but to keep going as his mate said, &quot;One more minute.&quot; the soldier strapped on his armor and look like valiant gladiator.

(Ken:)He knew what he had to do, he was the only one who could do it. He had to gather what forces were left, rally them together and rebuild the ruined English countryside.  It wouldn&#039;t be easy, the Vikings still were about, but he could do it, after all, his father didn&#039;t call him Thor for nothing.</description>
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<p>(Ken:)It was a lone and dreary day in England where Tom Lived.  He was picking himself up from the heaped dead the Vikings had left.  His armor was badly damaged and he couldn&#8217;t find his captain anywhere.  The Sky was a perfect blue, the grass green where there wasn&#8217;t blood, (Richard:) it was as if no battle had occurred at all. </p>
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<p>Gim (with a &#8216;G&#8217;) keep his had under his armor on his shoulder (Hayley:) as he realized the gratefulness he had at that moment for his country. The aliens who had come down to England that day could have indeed destroyed his country. (Camille:) Being a hater of aliens he knew he must seek revenge. He did not work his whole life to watch his country fall apart before his eyes. </p>
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<p>As he sat (Nick:) there for a moment, waiting, hoping, nothing left but to keep going as his mate said, &#8220;One more minute.&#8221; the soldier strapped on his armor and look like valiant gladiator.</p>
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<p>(Ken:)He knew what he had to do, he was the only one who could do it. He had to gather what forces were left, rally them together and rebuild the ruined English countryside.  It wouldn&#8217;t be easy, the Vikings still were about, but he could do it, after all, his father didn&#8217;t call him Thor for nothing.
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		<title>Comment on Team Free Write by S_Mckay</title>
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		<dc:creator>S_Mckay</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 23 Feb 2010 17:37:19 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>&quot;We&#039;ve only a minute,&quot; rushed Martha. Their Intergalactic Paddy-wagon was losing helm integrity. The captain yells, &quot;all hands to battle stations,&quot; as a torpedo hits the starboard side of the ship and breaks off pieces of broken hull, flung far away from the two battling craft. 
	&quot;I think that they might have a hard time recovering from that blow,&quot; the first lieutenant gloated.
	Martha was stunned. She had never tried to escape from such an awful foe. Their eyes glowed like a blazing fire. Nothing but hate came from the enemy and neither side would yield. 
	&quot;This all started with a number six combo and a bear trap!&quot; shouted Martha. 
	The enemy closed in and fired. The Paddy-wagon fired back. 
	Simultaneous explosions filled the empty space between the large planets surrounding them. 

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<p>&#8220;We&#8217;ve only a minute,&#8221; rushed Martha. Their Intergalactic Paddy-wagon was losing helm integrity. The captain yells, &#8220;all hands to battle stations,&#8221; as a torpedo hits the starboard side of the ship and breaks off pieces of broken hull, flung far away from the two battling craft.<br />
	&#8220;I think that they might have a hard time recovering from that blow,&#8221; the first lieutenant gloated.<br />
	Martha was stunned. She had never tried to escape from such an awful foe. Their eyes glowed like a blazing fire. Nothing but hate came from the enemy and neither side would yield.<br />
	&#8220;This all started with a number six combo and a bear trap!&#8221; shouted Martha.<br />
	The enemy closed in and fired. The Paddy-wagon fired back.<br />
	Simultaneous explosions filled the empty space between the large planets surrounding them. </p>
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